Band 7 upgrades — Task 2 rewriting

Work through the Band 6.5 model below. Identify the weakness against each criterion, then produce your own Band 7 version before you read the model answer.

1. 1

   Band 6.5 body paragraph: 'Firstly, technology is very useful for education. Students can find many informations on the internet and it is very fast. Also, online courses are cheap. So technology is good for students.' — List one weakness for each of the four criteria.

   • Task Response: assertion repeated, no developed example
   • Coherence: 'Firstly / Also / So' is mechanical signposting
   • Lexical Resource: 'very useful', 'good', 'cheap' are imprecise; 'informations' is uncountable
   • Grammar: all short simple sentences, one countability error
2. 2

   Rewrite the topic sentence so it states a clear, arguable position.

3. 3

   Write one developed supporting sentence with a specific example (not a statistic you invented).

4. 4

   Now write the full Band 7 paragraph (4–5 sentences).

5. 5

   Which conclusion is closer to Band 7?

   In conclusion, I think technology is very important and it has many advantages and disadvantages.In conclusion, while technology cannot replace skilled teaching, its capacity to widen access makes it an indispensable part of modern education.
6. 6

   Correct the countability error: 'Students can find many ______ on the internet.'

7. 7

   Self-assess your rewrite: give yourself 6, 6.5 or 7 on each of the four criteria and write one action for the weakest one.

   • Task Response — is every part of the question answered and developed?
   • Coherence — does each paragraph have one central idea with clear progression?
   • Lexical Resource — count your repeated words
   • Grammar — count your error-free sentences